The first paragraph I did two months ago was my mask paragraph. I used good transition words for my first second and third thoughts. One area I could have done better in was detail.
Last month I wrote a paragraph on Minecraft education Edition. I did so much better and I improved so much. I added way more details and had a better introductory sentence. Even though it was better I still need to work on my spelling and my grammar. My goal for next time is to do brainstorming without the help of my teachers.